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IN THE PAST, KNOWLEDGE WAS STORED IN BOOKS. TODAY, PEOPLE STORED KNOWLEDGE ON THE INTERNET. DO THE ADVANTAGES OF THIS OUTWEIGH THE DISADVANTAGES?

#books #people #internet #outweigh
IN AN EVER-PROGRESSIVE SOCIETY, KNOWLEDGE ARE NOW STORED ON THE ONLINE PLATFORM RATHER THAN IN BOOKS LIKE IN THE PAST.IN LIGHT OF
THIS
, THE AUTHOR CONTEND THAT THE BENEFITS OF
TIME SAVING
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 AND DURABLE STORAGE OUTWEIGH THE
DRAWBACK
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DRAWBACKS
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 OF MISINFORMATION OR INACCURATE EXPERTISE. ON THE ONE HAND, IT IS VITAL TO UNDERSTAND THAT ONLINE BOOK UTILITY IS BY FAR THE MOST EFFECTIVE WAY TO SAVE
TIME
WHILE
 STUDYING.
IN OTHER WORDS
, LEARNERS
ARE
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NO LONGER NEED TO TRAVEL A RELATIVELY LONG DISTANCE TO THE LIBRARY OR SPEND SEVERAL HOURS WITH A BOOK FINDING NECESSARY DETAILS BECAUSE E-BOOKS ARE FAR MORE ACCESSIBLE AND CONVENIENT TO USE AT
ELSEWHERE
.
CONSEQUENTLY
, READERS COULD SAVE A SIGNIFICANT AMOUNT OF
TIME
. ONE CLEAR CASE FOR
THIS
 IS THE INCREMENT IN E-BOOK ACCESS OVER THE PAST DECADE.
ON THE OTHER HAND
, SOME PEOPLE JUSTIFIED THAT ONLINE
BOOK
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 MAY POSE A THREAT TO READERS BECAUSE OF MISINFORMATION.
THIS
 BELIEF IS BASED ON THE FACT THAT ONLINE SECURITY IS TOO LOOSE THAT CYBER
CIMINALS
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CRIMINALS
 WOULD EXPLOIT
THIS
 TO GAIN MONEY ILLEGALLY.
THIS
 STANDPOINT IS RIGHT TO A CERTAIN EXTENT, BUT NOWADAYS MOST OF THE INFORMATION
IS
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RECEIVED A VERIFIED MARK FROM THE ONER.
HENCE
,
READER
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THE READER
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 CAN BASE ON THE EXISTENCE OF THAT MARK TO DECIDE
HETHER
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WHETHER
 THE INFORMATION IS OFFICIAL OR NOT. ANOTHER FACTOR WORTH CONSIDERING IS THAT
STORAGING
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STORING
 KNOWLEDGE ON VIRTUAL PLATFORMS COULD BE THE OPPTIMAL METHOD TO PRESERVE IT. PARTICULARLY, DATA POSTED ON THE INTERNET WILL BE
SAVE
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SAVED
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PERMANANTLY
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PERMANENTLY
 IN THE SYSTEM UNLESS THE OWNER DECIDE TO EXCLUDE IT. AS A NATURAL OUTCOME, HUMAN EXPERTISE SAVED ON
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A VIRUAL
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VIRUAL
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VIRTUAL
 BASIS CAN NOT BE
TOPRNED
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OPENED
,
DISCRATCHED
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SCRATCHED
 OR FADED
OVERTIME
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OVER TIME
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. ONE
OUTSTADING
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OUTSTANDING
 INSTANCE IS THE VOYNICH MANUSCRIPT
HICH
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WHICH
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 WAS PRESERVED IN THE ONLINE INTERNATIONAL LIBRARY
OVER
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FOR OVER
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 THREE DECADES. TAKING ALL POINTS INTO ACCOUNT, IT SHOULD HAVE BEEN CLEARLY DEMONSTRATED THAT THE DRAWBACK OF INACCURATE DATA IS OUTWEIGH BY THE BENEFITS OF ENDURABLE SAVING SYSTEM AND CUTTING DOWN
TIME CONSUMING
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.
HENCE
, IT IS NONSENSE TO OVERSHADOW THE MERITS OF STORING DETAILS ONLINE
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Grammar
Pay attention to subject-verb agreement, such as 'knowledge **are**' which should be 'knowledge **is**'. Avoid minor grammatical errors to enhance clarity.
Substantiation
Ensure that examples provided clearly relate to the main point being argued. For instance, the **Voynich Manuscript** example could be more detailed to directly support the argument about **durable storage**.
Coherence
Work on building a smoother flow between sentences and paragraphs. Use linking phrases or words to connect ideas more seamlessly and enhance **coherence**.
Task Achievement
The essay addresses the topic and provides a clear stance that the benefits of storing knowledge on the internet outweigh the disadvantages. This demonstrates a good understanding of **task achievement**.
Structure
The essay generally follows a logical structure, including an introduction and conclusion. This promotes **coherence and cohesion**.
Substantiation
There is a good attempt to support main points with examples, which is essential for a robust **task response**.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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