IN THE PAST, KNOWLEDGE WAS STORED IN BOOKS. TODAY, PEOPLE STORED KNOWLEDGE ON THE INTERNET. DO THE ADVANTAGES OF THIS OUTWEIGH THE DISADVANTAGES?

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IN AN EVER-PROGRESSIVE SOCIETY, KNOWLEDGE ARE NOW STORED ON THE ONLINE PLATFORM RATHER THAN IN BOOKS LIKE IN THE PAST.IN LIGHT OF

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, THE AUTHOR CONTEND THAT THE BENEFITS OF

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TIME SAVING

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AND DURABLE STORAGE OUTWEIGH THE

DRAWBACK

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DRAWBACKS

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OF MISINFORMATION OR INACCURATE EXPERTISE. ON THE ONE HAND, IT IS VITAL TO UNDERSTAND THAT ONLINE BOOK UTILITY IS BY FAR THE MOST EFFECTIVE WAY TO SAVE

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STUDYING.

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, LEARNERS

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NO LONGER NEED TO TRAVEL A RELATIVELY LONG DISTANCE TO THE LIBRARY OR SPEND SEVERAL HOURS WITH A BOOK FINDING NECESSARY DETAILS BECAUSE E-BOOKS ARE FAR MORE ACCESSIBLE AND CONVENIENT TO USE AT

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CONSEQUENTLY

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, READERS COULD SAVE A SIGNIFICANT AMOUNT OF

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. ONE CLEAR CASE FOR

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IS THE INCREMENT IN E-BOOK ACCESS OVER THE PAST DECADE.

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, SOME PEOPLE JUSTIFIED THAT ONLINE

BOOK

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MAY POSE A THREAT TO READERS BECAUSE OF MISINFORMATION.

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BELIEF IS BASED ON THE FACT THAT ONLINE SECURITY IS TOO LOOSE THAT CYBER

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WOULD EXPLOIT

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TO GAIN MONEY ILLEGALLY.

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STANDPOINT IS RIGHT TO A CERTAIN EXTENT, BUT NOWADAYS MOST OF THE INFORMATION

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RECEIVED A VERIFIED MARK FROM THE ONER.

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READER

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CAN BASE ON THE EXISTENCE OF THAT MARK TO DECIDE

HETHER

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THE INFORMATION IS OFFICIAL OR NOT. ANOTHER FACTOR WORTH CONSIDERING IS THAT

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STORING

KNOWLEDGE ON VIRTUAL PLATFORMS COULD BE THE OPPTIMAL METHOD TO PRESERVE IT. PARTICULARLY, DATA POSTED ON THE INTERNET WILL BE

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PERMANANTLY

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IN THE SYSTEM UNLESS THE OWNER DECIDE TO EXCLUDE IT. AS A NATURAL OUTCOME, HUMAN EXPERTISE SAVED ON

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A VIRUAL

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VIRUAL

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VIRTUAL

BASIS CAN NOT BE

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OPENED

DISCRATCHED

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SCRATCHED

OR FADED

OVERTIME

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OVER TIME

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. ONE

OUTSTADING

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OUTSTANDING

INSTANCE IS THE VOYNICH MANUSCRIPT

HICH

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WAS PRESERVED IN THE ONLINE INTERNATIONAL LIBRARY

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THREE DECADES. TAKING ALL POINTS INTO ACCOUNT, IT SHOULD HAVE BEEN CLEARLY DEMONSTRATED THAT THE DRAWBACK OF INACCURATE DATA IS OUTWEIGH BY THE BENEFITS OF ENDURABLE SAVING SYSTEM AND CUTTING DOWN

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HENCE

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, IT IS NONSENSE TO OVERSHADOW THE MERITS OF STORING DETAILS ONLINE

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Grammar

Pay attention to subject-verb agreement, such as 'knowledge **are**' which should be 'knowledge **is**'. Avoid minor grammatical errors to enhance clarity.

Substantiation

Ensure that examples provided clearly relate to the main point being argued. For instance, the **Voynich Manuscript** example could be more detailed to directly support the argument about **durable storage**.

Coherence

Work on building a smoother flow between sentences and paragraphs. Use linking phrases or words to connect ideas more seamlessly and enhance **coherence**.

Task Achievement

The essay addresses the topic and provides a clear stance that the benefits of storing knowledge on the internet outweigh the disadvantages. This demonstrates a good understanding of **task achievement**.

Structure

The essay generally follows a logical structure, including an introduction and conclusion. This promotes **coherence and cohesion**.

Substantiation

There is a good attempt to support main points with examples, which is essential for a robust **task response**.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

Paragraph 1 - Introduction

Sentence 1 - Background statement
Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

Sentence 1 - Summary
Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

332 words

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