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Smacking children is the best form of discipline. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There are
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a number
 of techniques used by teachers to discipline their students and smacking is certainly a popular option. Some people think that physical
punishment
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 is the best way to teach discipline to children. I will argue that
sometime
on certain occasions or in certain cases but not always
sometimes
 it is necessary to punish by physical means to teach young people a lesson.
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 with, I side with the opinion that sometimes the use of corporal
punishment
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 is very much needed despite of its drawbacks. There are instances when a child does not do his school homework or study and he
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only performs
has only performed
 when his father comes up with a stick and asks him to do.
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Certain
 people only work when they are put under a gun.
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, when I was younger, I was not very obedient to my mother and when my father used to come and smack in the back of my head,
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, I had to follow the instruction of my mother.
On the other hand
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, punishing physically can cause harm to the children in a long run.
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, physical
punishment
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 has its own benefits, sometime it can be dangerous for children’s growth. It is evident that some young fellows cannot overcome the
punishment
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 they had in their early childhood and they suffer it for the rest of their life. In conclusion,
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 essay argued that why sometimes
physical way
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a physical way
 of punishing is
necessary but
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necessary, but
 it should not be tried too much when a child cannot overcome
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.

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