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some people think that keeping pets is good for children while other think that it is dangerous dangerous and unhealthy discuss both view and give your opinion

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In the days of
millennium
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the millennium
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the society is polarised into two graphs equally regarding to the notion that, many individuals say that keeping pets is best for blooming buds.
others
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Others
 believe that it is risky and poor for health. Different people have distinct mindset. The following paragraphs would shed light on the both approaches before the making final sheets. To commence with
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first notion
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the first notion
 that
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there has
a
expresses position, direction or location, or point in time
at
 Myriad things in its favour of keeping pets animals in their houses.
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first
preceding all others in time or space or degree
First
 and foremost
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it is good for children as well as home security provided by domestic dogs in 24*7
time
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, humans can not
worried
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worry
 about their wealth.
Secondly
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, the cats and dogs are quite attractive for offspring, they want to play with them and enjoy their spare
time
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,
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,
instead
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 of spending hours on
mobile phone
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a mobile phone
the mobile phone
mobile phones
.
Atlast
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At last
, dog shows empathy, respect towards other human beings and obey their
owner
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own
 commands. Shifting towards the
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 school of the thought, domestic animals carry a lot of diseases causing-bacteria, Which is
danger
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a danger
for
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to
children
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children's
child
child's
 health.
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, in our homes or outside the homes these pets
are roam
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roam
are roaming
 freely in some contaminated areas and often pick up many Pathogens that harmful for
aspirants
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aspirant's
 body, if children
can came
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can come
closed
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close
 to their dog they can get rashes.
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, some vaccinations should be given to pets for human benefits, if we cannot provide
time
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 to
time
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 check-up.
As a result
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, it's lead to sickness takes place in our homes.
Therefore
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sometimes aspirants playing with dogs if ever dog can bite them
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They may get rabies and other deadly diseases. Hammering the
last
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 nail, I personally feel that keeping
pets animal
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a pet animal
pet animal
 in our homes and show them to love and affection.
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however
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However
, there are some
risks doing so
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risks in doing so
.
Therefore
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, it is suggested to have a pet at least outside of our bedroom.
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