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Discipline has indeed become a major issue in many schools

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Introduction
Discipline
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 has indeed become a major issue in many schools. While some people believe that
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 is the parents’ responsibility, others argue that it belongs to the teachers.
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, in my opinion, both parents and teachers are equally accountable.
Body paragraph 1
On one side of the argument, some argue that teachers have more
experience
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 to train children. They can deal with these situations as they have
experience
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 and skill in understanding and controlling the different natures of
students
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the students
. A teacher,
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, can tell
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of
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experience whether
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experience, whether
 the student has any bad behavioural problems or it is because of problems at home. If teachers pay more attention to these students, there will probably be fewer disobedient students in the classroom.
Body paragraph 2
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, parents can
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 play a vital part in teaching good
discipline
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.
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 is mainly because children are close to their parents, so they can more easily share their feelings and problems with them.
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, students spend fewer hours at school than they do at home, which gives parents a greater opportunity to teach them the importance of
discipline
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. It will not only make them more obedient but
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 increase their performance at school.
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, teachers won’t have to focus on
discipline
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 so much and will have more time to concentrate on other important factors
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 as communication and cooperation, among others.
Conclusion
In conclusion, while teachers need to put a certain amount of effort to make students obedient using their teaching
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, I
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 believe that parents should take responsibility to teach children about the importance of
discipline
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.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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