In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their level of health and fitness is decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays many

countries people

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countries, people

are prefer

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are preferring

to work on white collar jobs rather

then

conjunction used in comparatives

than

choosing the jobs where more physical actions are required.

Then

people

are more tend to be

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are tending to be more

are more tending to be

focussed on Job and their commitments due to that more

times

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time

they

are fail

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fail

have failed

to connect with their soul.

Naturally every

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Naturally, every

animal of the world will have some connect with Soul and Mind. The humans are nowadays not ready to

listen

perceive (sound) via the auditory sense

hear

the instructions given by their

body

That is

the main reason of not having a food on time with proper

nuetritions

(physiology) the organic process of nourishing or being nourished; the processes by which an organism assimilates food and uses it for growth and maintenance

nutrition

Foremost thing

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The foremost thing

also

cultivating more non-organic Vegetables and fruits is

cause

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the cause

of these problems for unbalance weight of people. In my life,

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prefer rather would go to take food on time no matter how am busy at office work. Unless

refers to the speaker or writer

feel

hunger

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the hunger

refers to the speaker or writer

would not like to eat often. Because

human

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the human body

body

is designed in

such

a way that would sense if the human

body

really wants to have something input as a food. As a human they have to be followed some proper diet plan according to their residence and nature of the work and so on.

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they encounter some of the health

issue

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issues

like hair fall and

gasterisc

relating to or involving the stomach

gastric

problems they might need to consult with physical advisor to get to know about their

body

metabolism to mitigate these problems in future.

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