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In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their level of health and fitness is decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#countries #weight #people #level #health #fitness #measures
Nowadays many
countries people
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countries, people
are prefer
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are preferring
 to work on white collar jobs rather
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
 choosing the jobs where more physical actions are required.
Then
 people
are more tend to be
Suggestion
are tending to be more
are more tending to be
 focussed on Job and their commitments due to that more
times
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time
 they
are fail
Suggestion
fail
have failed
 to connect with their soul.
Naturally every
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Naturally, every
 animal of the world will have some connect with Soul and Mind. The humans are nowadays not ready to
listen
perceive (sound) via the auditory sense
hear
 the instructions given by their
body
.
That is
 the main reason of not having a food on time with proper
nuetritions
(physiology) the organic process of nourishing or being nourished; the processes by which an organism assimilates food and uses it for growth and maintenance
nutrition
.
Foremost thing
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The foremost thing
 is
also
 cultivating more non-organic Vegetables and fruits is
cause
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the cause
 of these problems for unbalance weight of people. In my life,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 prefer rather would go to take food on time no matter how am busy at office work. Unless
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 feel
hunger
Suggestion
the hunger
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 would not like to eat often. Because
human
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the human body
body
 is designed in
such
 a way that would sense if the human
body
 really wants to have something input as a food. As a human they have to be followed some proper diet plan according to their residence and nature of the work and so on.
if
Suggestion
If
 they encounter some of the health
issue
Suggestion
issues
 like hair fall and
gasterisc
relating to or involving the stomach
gastric
 problems they might need to consult with physical advisor to get to know about their
body
 metabolism to mitigate these problems in future.

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