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Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good father.

#people #idea #schools #person #parent #skills #father
No one can deny that
schools
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the personality of the pupils, one of the bright ideas is that
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 teachers can train students to be
a
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wonderful
father
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 or
mother
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. In my opinion,
this
 is a very fantastic idea and really it is out
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Firstly
,
persons
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 from childhood to adolescence spend much
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 at
schools
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 than at home, so learning
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something different
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 the academic curriculum will be attractive to them. Being a parent is not a simple thing, that's why it is important to know
the
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how to grow up a child and to deal with him/her in different situations,
this
 skill is well known to teachers
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 because it is the core of their job.
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, tutors can deal with a crying child effectively, know the reason
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 crying and
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, solve the problem of him/her.
In addition
,
this
 skill can be transferred to the student. So, why the government does not apply
this
 as a social activity in
schools
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Moreover
, the community needs a highly skilful parent who
have
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 some characteristics to be a role model to the children. Being a father or a mother, you have to
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 in treating a special problem for a child, but more assertive with the youths because it is a dangerous stage and they may harm themselves. For
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, if parents discover that their teenage son addicted
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, they must treat him immediately. Because
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 he may suffer from liver problems in the future. To summarize, to be a parent is not only a talent, but it is a skill
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and
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 can be learned, particularly in
schools
 where the students spend most of their time.
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task response
In the introduction, clearly state your position on whether schools should teach young people how to be good parents.
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