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Using computer every day can have more negatives than positive effects on young children. Do you agree or disagree?

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There is an argument about the using of computers on a daily basis, some people think that, it is harmful for youths, but others think that, teenagers will be more benefited. In fact, I totally agree with the
second
 opinion, because using computers have some advantages more than its disadvantages.
Firstly
, young people use laptops and desktops to communicate with others at different country, which is one of the benefits.
Consequently
, their communication skills will increase because of speaking and chatting every day.
For example
, when a child speaks a lot with somebody else rather than his family, he will be able to communicate and negotiate with anybody without hesitation, and that will have a good impact on him which make him brave.
Moreover
, the
second
 important advantage is learning. There is a huge number of online courses in many fields like, learning a new language, which will affect positively on the future job of the young people, because being bilingual will increase the chance to work abroad in a multinational company and without doubt with high salary.
Also
, they can gain more skills.
For instance
, they can learn the selling skills through watching online videos and searching the websites about
this
 topic.
However
, Why do the parents prevent their children to utilize the technology? To sum up, even there are some bad thoughts about using the computers regularly, but it is still beneficiary of the users, especially, the young one because their ability to learn and digest new skills still higher than the adults.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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