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Recently, abortion increases rapidly and becomes a controversial topic. Some people suppose that abortion should be legal while others are against it.

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Our
society
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 is not an ideal. Different kinds of families live there. We see daily, many cases of the gender discrimination in our
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 and
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 the issues due to the poverty. There are many causes, why
abortion
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 cases are increasing. Some of the causes are; family pressure, poverty, unwanted pregnancy, issues in the fetus and many more. If we look overall, we will see, few cases are legitimate, but many
abortion
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 incidents are illegal. People are illegally going for an
abortion
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 due to their own reasons. But, if it becomes legal
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 it will be more misused rather than used.
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, female foeticide,
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 is a major issue in the families. Some people don't want female in their family and they give their own logic to justify it.
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 is a completely illegal practise going on in some countries.
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,
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 was not illegal in India, but due to increased cases of female foeticide, the government made it illegal. So, if it had been legal, it would have been impossible to stop the misuse.
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, there are many genuine reasons, where
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 is actually needed to save the life of the mother.
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, the cases, where issues in foetus and the cases where pregnancy is life threatening, etc.
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, there was a case in any country, where family knew that the born kid will not survive after birth and life of the mother will be in danger while delivery. In
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 case,
abortion
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 justified. But that family struggled to get permission from the respective authority as
abortion
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 was not legal in that country. In summary,
abortion
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 is disputed topic and growing due to issues in the
society
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. Very few people, those are advocating it to be legal because they just want to avoid the issues in genuine cases. Most of the members
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of
 the
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 are not in favour of the
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becasue
for the reason that; on account of
because
 they know the consequences. So, it must not be legal and should be done in
rarest
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the rarest
 of the rare cases.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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