Some people believe that the responsibility is with the government to control the rise in obesity in children, others think the parents are the cause. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Peoples opinions differ as to whether the onus lies with the
government
or with the parents for the
increase
in
obessed
excessively fat
obese
abused
children. A few people believe that the
government
ought to be held liable for the rising number of overweight children,
In contrast
, some believe that the parents should be held accountable because children spend more
time
with them and because they provide more of what they consume. In my strong conviction, it depends on the
child
because they are in full
control
of what they eat and are not concerned about the aftermath. Admittedly, some consider that it is the responsibility of the administration to handle the hike for several reasons.
Firstly
, they possess the authority required to impose tax on these foods known to be the leading cause of bulk-
weight
such
as canned foods
otherwise
known as ready to eat foods. A survey that was conducted by the NAFDAC in 2017 revealed that about 50% of people living in urban areas had these meals as their staple food owing to the
fact
that a lot of people live busy lives and have little or no
time
to themselves to prepare healthy less-fattening
mealsPeoples
opinions differ as to whether the onus lies with the
government
or with the parents for the
increase
in
obesed
excessively fat
obese
abused
children. A few people believe that the
government
ought to be held liable for the rising number of overweight children,
In contrast
, some believe that the parents should be held accountable because children spend more
time
with them and because they provide more of what they consume. In my strong
conviction it
Accept comma addition
conviction, it
depends on the
child
because they are in full
control
of what they eat and are not concerned about the aftermath. Admittedly, some consider that it is the responsibility of the administration to handle the hike for several reasons.
Firstly
, they possess the authority required to impose tax on these foods known to be the leading cause of
bulk
Suggestion
the bulk weight
weight
such
as canned foods
otherwise
known as ready to eat foods. A survey that was conducted by the NAFDAC in 2017
revelead
make visible
revealed
that about 50% of people living in urban areas had these meals as their staple food owing to the
fact
that a lot of people live busy lives and have little or no
time
to themselves to prepare healthy less-fattening meals
.
Accept space
.
In addition
, these foods are less
expensive
Suggestion
expensive, thus
thus
they are highly purchased.
However
, an imposition of taxation will
increase
cost
Suggestion
costs
on them and as
such
discourage their purchase.
On the other hand
, parents should be made to account for their children's
health
because they provide most of what they consume. A
child
usually is not financially
bouyant
a geometric element that has position but no extension
point
to buy whatever they want and in most cases their parents do.
Moreover
,
parent
Suggestion
the parent
that
have
Suggestion
has
the habit of consuming these foods will hardly avoid their children from having them because children learn faster from what they see. According to an article in the 2013 edition, the author highlighted that most of the habits portrayed by children were
also
those of their parents.
Furthermore
, children tend to spend more of their
time
with their parents and so, if what they feast on
can not
can not
cannot
be regulated,
then
the chances of the
child
being healthy is slim which will apparently lead to
weight problem
Suggestion
weight problems
the weight problem
a weight problem
. To conclude, despite varying opinions, I believe that the
child
has a bigger role to play in the
control
of their
weight
owing to the
fact
that they determine what they want to ingest with little or no interest on their dangers.
However
, I would recommend proper awareness programs to be made to enable them the opportunity to know about their
health
. .
in
Suggestion
In
addition, these foods are less expensive,
thus
they are highly purchased.
However
, an imposition of taxation will
increase
the cost on them and as
such
discourage their purchase.
On the other hand
, parents should be made to account for their children's
health
because they provide most of what they consume. A
child
usually is not financially buoyant to buy whatever they want and in most cases their parents do.
Moreover
, parents that possess the habit of consuming these foods will hardly avoid their children from having them because children learn faster from what they see. According to an article in the 2013 edition, the author highlighted that most of the habits portrayed by children were
also
those of their parents.
Furthermore
, children tend to spend more of their
time
with their parents and so, if what they feast on cannot be regulated,
then
the chances of the
child
being healthy is slim which will apparently lead to
weight
problems. To conclude, despite varying opinions, I believe that the
child
has a bigger role to play in the
control
of their
weight
owing to the
fact
that they determine what they want to ingest with little or no interest on their dangers.
However
, I would recommend proper awareness programs to be made to enable them the opportunity to know about their
health
.
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