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Wealthy nations should assist poorer countries with humanitarian relief during natural disasters.do you agree or disagree?

#nations #countries #relief #disasters
It is argued that humanitarian aid should be given to developing countries during
natural catastrophe
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a natural catastrophe
natural catastrophes
 by developed countries.
This
 essay agrees with
this
 statement because developed nations have strong finance as well as needed equipment and the
development
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developer
 relations between two countries may be improved in future. There is no doubt that rich countries have a great source of advanced equipment and financial resources. For thousands of people in poorer countries are to suffer from many losses like casualties, deaths and diseases which makes the government difficult to
dealt
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deal
 with.
In addition
, due to lack of money and necessary emergency supplies, the damage could be worse and there are fears that the death toll could rise. In
such
 crucial situation, the aid emergency arrived to help with relief effort just in time is everything needed for
the poor
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the poorest
 citizens.
For instance
, during 1990 a sudden earthquake struck in Egypt, Italia sent their rescued team to help the Egyptian authorities to discover tens of living people under building debris. The relations between wealthy nations and the less affluent nations will be improved after all the supports. It’s not only the affected countries are
beneficial but
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beneficial, but
 the rich countries have some upcoming advantages of making excellent business. The less affluent nations would be thankful for
this
 assistance and have some policy adjustment for trading
such
 as reducing taxes, paperwork ease and opportunities to expand market. In 2016, Vietnam suffered from a severe flood and the government of Japan offered financial help to Vietnamese people. In 2017, Vietnam reduces taxes by 5% for products imported from Japan. To conclude, poorer countries should be assisted by rich countries to recover after facing severe natural disaster because wealthy nations are able to provide immediate assistance that poorer nations hardly can handle themselves and their relations will be
further
 consolidated
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Humanitarian relief
  • Infrastructure
  • Global solidarity
  • Disproportionately
  • External assistance
  • Rebuilding efforts
  • Disaster response
  • Investment in stability
  • Dependency theory
  • Responsible intervention
  • Paternalistic
  • Shared humanity
  • Sovereignty
  • Capabilities
  • Fatality rates
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