Some people believe that a crime is a result of social problems and poverty, others think that crime is a result of bad person’s nature. Discuss both views and give your opinion

The rate at which crimes are happening all across the world has risen. Whether it is due to poverty, social problems or a result of an
individuals
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individual
individual's
negative psychology
are
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is
primarily the aspects contributing to the thefts, murders, blackmailing and more. In
this
essay I will discuss both the sides and share my opinion.
Firstly
, individuals who land up
commiting
perform an act, usually with a negative connotation
committing
such
sinful acts are mostly due to problems in their sustainability and the desire to survive.
For instance
, recently -- a domestic help looted the house she worked at to pay
of
from a particular thing or place or position
off
her daughter's dowry.
Secondly
, their personal life conditions are so miserable that they feel no shame or guilt in doing so because they have no other way out.
Finally
, social issues and monetary helplessness lead to several crimes.
On the other hand
, a person's negative nature cannot be a strong enough reason to commit
such
life threatening blunders. At times, a person is mentally facing certain challenges which may lead him to commit certain crimes. To exemplify, a serial killer, who recently got caught, would abduct children and
then
kill them purely out of pleasure.
However
,
this
is fortunately a rare scenario and one must be psychologically very disturbed to perform
such
acts. To conclude, I strongly believe that it is the bad consequences that makes an individual do wrong things. Even though bad nature of a person can do
such
acts but
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acts, but
it takes much more than just the nature to commit
such
activities.
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