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Some people say that its government responsibility to clean the streets other beleive that is your own responsibility Discuss both views and share your experience

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It is widely argued whether state
organizations or
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organizations, or
 citizens should take
care
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 of keeping cities tidy and litter-free. Some people believe that
this
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 duty should fall under the governmental control,
however
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, others expect individuals to take
care
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 of
this
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 problem.
This
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 essay suggests that, though both points of views have a right to exist, streets should be kept in order by state-paid organizations.
This
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 essay will
discusss
to consider or examine in speech or writing
discuss
 both opinions. On the one hand, some people say that people who inhabit the streets should be responsible for their cleanliness. Since citizens take
care
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 of their apartments, gardens and balconies, they can as well be responsible for
streets neatness
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the streets neatness
 by not littering and keeping things tidy.
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 point of view may be based on the fact that if each one of us starts
cleaning
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cleanly
 by themselves, there will be nothing left to clean for state-owned companies.
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, kids in Russia are
tought
impart skills or knowledge to
taught
thought
 from the very early age that it is rude and bad to litter and leave dirty things on the streets.
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, there are no cleaning crews in my country to take
care
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 of messy streets, because average
citizens keep them
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citizens to keep them
 in a neat order.
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, it is believed that the streets cleanliness should be under
governmental umbrella
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the governmental umbrella
 of responsibility.
State
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The state
 should accept
this
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 duty alongside
such
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 duties as building maintenance, trash disposal and recycling, etc. The reason behind it is the fact that citizens pay taxes, housing fees and accommodation duties that should cover
payroll
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the payroll
 of cleaning professionals.
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, real estate management companies in Dubai cover keeping buildings and streets around the buildings clean, tidy and neat as a part of the housing service they provide. To sum up, though both points of view have their ground for
existance
the state or fact of existing
existence
,
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,
this
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 essay agrees that the task of keeping the right level of cleanliness
on
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in
of
 the streets should fall in state
care
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 and individuals should not be burdened with
this
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 duty.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • municipal services
  • civic duty
  • public health
  • tax revenue
  • cleanliness standards
  • legal enforcement
  • personal habits
  • community-driven
  • infrastructure
  • shared responsibility
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