The graph below shows how elderly people in the United States spent their free time between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows how elderly people in the United States spent their free time between 1980 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates how elderly people in the United States spent their free
time
between 1980 and 2010.
Overall
, an upward trend was experienced by watching tv, hiking, reading and surfing the internet,
while
theater
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showed a downward trend. Almost most of the
activites
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activities
had some fluctuations except for hiking. In 1980,
popularity
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of reading was slowly growing from 30% to 40% but from
1990s
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it went down even lower than it was before, anyway it became trendy again with its rapid jump in
2000s
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. Hiking was slowly and steadily gaining
its
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popularity
from 1980 being popular among 20% only to 2010s when it became the most popular way of spending free
time
. Theatre was the only activity losing its
popularity
in 1980 but still it started gaining it again from
1990s
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to
2000s
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and slowly
moving
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up after. TV was always
on
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one of the highest positions, nearly 60% of people in
1980s
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spent their spare
time
watching
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TV and it reached 70% two decades later. But its
popularity
dropped and is slowly moving down since the internet became trendy in
2000s
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. Having lower than 10%
percent
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popularity
among
elderly
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the elderly
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till
2000s
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the level of people preferring
this
way of spending their free
time
rapidly increased in
2000s
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and is trending to move higher so it pretends to have one of the highest or even the highest rank among all activities listed before.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 82%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words time, popularity with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rapid" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 4 times.

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