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The modern emphasis on computers reduces the development of any creative ability. How far do you agree?

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Some people are of opinion that any
creativity
 would be killed by the emphasis on computers.
Nevertheless
, I think it is only right to some extent. The following paragraphs w
ill explained
Suggestion
will explain
the reasons.
To begin
 with, computers do impact people in a negative effect and creative ability without exception. Several decades ago especially before the Internet revolution, people tend to spend their past-time in contact with mother nature, which could cultivate their perception of pursuing the arts and
further
 boost their
creativity
. But nowadays, the lifestyle has transformed t
o
Suggestion
into
another way. There are increasing number of people indulge themselves in a virtual world created by the technology
such
 as social media, and turn to ignore the beauty of the surrounding.
However
, the view differs considerably when it comes to the issue whether people could
use
 c
omputer
Suggestion
computers
a computer
the computer
properly. If people could
use
 it in a w
isely
Suggestion
wiser
wise
way that definitely could be the essential tool to nature the
creativity
. Take the a
rchitet
someone who creates plans to be used in making something (such as buildings)
architect
for example
. The capability of them is not only about drawing
,
Accept space
,
but
also
 about
use
 the software, which could transform 2D pictures to 3D, to present their idea. They could be s
timulate
Suggestion
stimulated
by different ways of presenting. In conclusion, playing the emphasis on computers would influence people’s
c
reativity but
Accept comma addition
creativity, but
the result of it would depend on how you
use
 it.

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