All over the world societies are facing growing problem with obesity. This problem affects both children and adult. What are the reason for this rise in obesity? How could it be tackled?

Globally, the percentage increase of overweight children and adults has been a major concern in the society. Several issues
has
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have
cause
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caused
this
increase.
However
,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
believe some measures must be taken, in order to reduce
this
this
diturbing
causing distress or worry or anxiety
disturbing
trend of
obesity
. Children was well as adults nowadays consume too much of junks and other foods that contains fat, which is
major reason
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a major reason
the major reason
for adding too much weight. Engaging in enough
exercise
is considered to be a waste of time, as many find themselves to be too lazy to have enough
exercise
.
Also
, proper measures should be taken as what kind of foods should be consumed and why and when to consume
such
food
.
For example
, a woman in the United States gained above 300 pounds within two years, when asked why she has gained so much weight, she said her inability to control the amount of
food
she eats per day is the major problem she is battling with.
Also
, people try as much as possible to engage in hard works which is a form of
exercise
and prefer to be in a relaxed manner while working,
this
in turn is
major problem
Suggestion
a major problem
in the society an too much of relaxation
also
leads to addition of weight.
However
,
this
incresing
becoming greater or larger
increasing
number of
obesity
can be
fight
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fought
against, if children and adults can control the amount of fat consumed each day, parents can can
also
be of
important
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importance
in making sure the
food
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food, food
food
giving to their children does not contain too much fat and should fine time to monitor the kinds of junks their children buy in school.
Adults
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Adults, however
however
, should ensure that they engage in enough
exercise
, and try as much as possible to ignore too much pleasure during working hours. The gym
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
in
proper place
Suggestion
the proper place
to keep fit, and adults who work while seating for so long must
unsure
make certain of
ensure
insure
they visit the gym
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
to burn
of
from a particular thing or place or position
off
any kinds of fat.
Also
, taking into consideration the device of doctors as regards
obesity
will be
great idea
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a great idea
, as those who battle with
obesity
should endeavour to see
fitness doctore
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the fitness doctor
fitness doctor
fitness doctors
as to what kind of foods should be
taking
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taken
at a proper time. In conclusion,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
believe the growing trend of
obesity
can be dealt with, if the following
is taking
Suggestion
is taken
into
consideratiion
the process of giving careful thought to something
consideration
: ability to control the amount fat beings consumed each day, and
secondly
if proper and adequate
exercise
is scheduled after long hours of work.
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