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Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the word Do you think is a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays, there is a huge similarity in all products, that makes all countries becoming Almost the same
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opinion it
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opinion, it
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when ever
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countries missing
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it is speculated that development of connection tools between the people's
such
 an internet connection. Mobile phones and even television. That makes everything available for
every one
all people
everyone
. In my personal opinion The advantages of these similarities are when
any one
any person
anyone
 travelling abroad and missing any things he/she can find it
to
to a degree exceeding normal or proper limits
too
 fast.
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In contrast
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the disadvantaged when all countries look
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identical
 and lose their cultural values that effect
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to a severe or serious degree
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 even in tourism.
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 see the same products in shops the word over is boring and every place
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looks
 just the same as the one they visited previously.
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