Recent figures show an increase in violent crime among youngsters under the age of 18. Some psychologists claim that the basic reason for this is that children these days are not getting the social and emotional learning they need from parents and teachers. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
When considering the reasons for the increased incidence of violent crimes
comitted
by teenagers, one should bear in mind the complexity of the issue. Some people, including bound or obligated, as under a pledge to a particular cause, action, or attitude
committed
my self
, believe the main reason for reflexive form of "me"
myself
this
resides in the lack of social and familial support
given to children during their childhood. In the following essay, I will provide Arguments and examples to support
my opinion.
In contrast
to previous years, parents spend substantially less time with their kiyoungsters
ds
nowadays. mature female of mammals of which the male is called 'buck'
does
deals
This
change resulted in the fact that children ramain
without parental stay the same; remain in a certain state
remain
support
for many hours, and are more exposed to negative social influences. This
deficit in parental support
and direction is especially apperant
during high school years, where teenagers are easily influenced by social pressure. clearly revealed to the mind or the senses or judgment
apparent
Consequently
, youngsters are more prone to commite
perform an act, usually with a negative connotation
commit
committed
ileagal
acts prohibited by law or by official or accepted rules
illegal
such
as drug and alcohol related crimes, and violent crimes. According to the Israeli government, for example
, 60% of the teenagers who were covicted
of a crime, did not have an active parental find or declare guilty
convicted
support
during their childhood. This
demonstrates, that parents have a major role in the social education of their chidren
, and without it teenagers are much more prone to commit crimes.
Aside from parental a young person of either sex
children
support
, teachers have an important role in the emotional learining
of children. Because they are not a part of the family, children can the cognitive process of acquiring skill or knowledge
learning
appraoch
teachers for emotional move towards
approach
guidens
in cases where they are afraid to talk to their parents. something that provides direction or advice as to a decision or course of action
guidance
This
is especially important in issue like sexual abuse, homosexuality and religious preferences. Unfortunately, over the last
twenty years teachers have less free time to talk to their students about personal affairs. This
results in the fact that many teenagers do not have the emotional support
they need from
their children; leading to increased emotional difficulties and higher chances to break the law. According to the New York TImes, less than 20% of the children reported they share their social difficulties with their teachers. Suggestion
for
This
illustrates that educatonal
system nowadays do not provide sufficient emotional relating to the process of education
educational
support
to students.
In conclusion, I believe that lack of parental and educational support
are the main reasons for the increased crime among youngsters. Both parents and teachers should provide a stronger
social and emotional Suggestion
strong
support
in order to protect our children.Submitted by chilafp on
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