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Nuclear energy is better than other sources of energy to meet the increasing need. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Human being use fossil fuel to generate the
energy
 for many years, but scientists never give up their effect to find out alternative
energy
 sources. Nuclear
energy
 is regarded as an alternative
energy
 in some developed countries and
this
 phenomenon has aroused a heated debate among the citizens. The advantages of nuclear
power
 are various, but the most obvious one is its high efficiency. The nuclear
power
station
 can produce several times as much as
power
 as traditional
power
station
. So the problem of
energy
 shortage can be solved by nuclear
power
.
Also
,
the the
definite article
the
 nuclear
power
 is green
energy
, which is different from traditional
energy
,
such
 as coal, gas and fossil fuel. And the nuclear
power
not emit
Suggestion
doesn't emit
 greenhouse gas in process of generating
energy
. It is good for
environment
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environmental
 protection.
Although
, the nuclear
power
have
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has
 many advantages, it is hard to draw a conclusion that the nuclear
power
 is
the better
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better
 than other sources of
energy
.
Accept space
.
 It is well
know
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known
 that nuclear
power
station
 is easy to influenced by natural disaster,
such
 as tsunami, storm and earthquake. In these
year
Suggestion
years
, the tsunami destroyed the nuclear
power
station
 off coast of the Japan.
Therefore
, the sea was polluted and the sea animals were killed by a large amount of nuclear wastes, which were
leak
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leaked
leaking
 from the nuclear
power
 plant. We can come to a conclusion that the nuclear
power
 is vulnerable and easy to influenced by
outside factor
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outside factors
an outside factor
. In conclusion, nuclear
power
 is a double edged sword. It is expected to continue serving the human being. But
mean while
at the same time but in another place
meanwhile
 we should try out best to find out
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
energy
 sources.
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