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Too much attention is given to headline-grabbing disasters like earthquakes and floods. Government should concentrate their resources on educating people about the risk they face nearer to home, which can cost far more lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

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Natural disasters are distressing for people and the government. Media agencies seem to play their significant role in capturing the attention in dealing with
such
 issues and the after effects. Regarding question whether the individual needs training to counter
such
 effects, I completely disagree because
such
 events need capable resources, which are usually beyond the capacity of the common people.
To begin
 with, the government should encourage better funding and investment for infrastructure in the form of disaster-resistant buildings and overpass.
This
 means that there will be a minimum number of casualties, resulting from the collision of high-rise constructions.
For instance
, laws in Japan prohibit constructions, which are not able to survive earthquakes of minimum magnitudes.
Consequently
, surviving techniques, trainings and relevant equipment must be in the possession of people, in dealing with the after effects of a disaster.
Furthermore
, disasters sometimes are not forecasted and happens suddenly, meaning that people will not be aware of the happening or the consequences. In
such
 situations, the state or its funding agencies can play a valuable part.
For instance
, in Pakistan, various NGOs contributed, in the form of shelter, health care facilities and food supplies for the survivors of an earthquake in 2005.
This
 means that only training could not be helpful, as people were struggling with a wide variety of circumstances. In conclusion, while sufficient knowledge is required to overcome the effects of natural calamities, the macro level strategies with micro-level initiatives by the government are necessary to counter
such
 effects, as they seem to have a significant effect in saving lives.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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