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You recently discovered that there are plans to construct a new block of flats in your local area. Write a letter to the local authority. In your letter: · explain how you know about the plans · describe the negative effects this will have on your neighbourhood · suggest a possible solution to the problem

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
 letter regarding the new flat construction in our neighbourhood. I have heard from a very good friend of mine, who works in the construction company in
this
 area. The project announcement made most individuals worried.
This
 project, itself, will create a negative impact on the environment
as well as
 on the residents because you are planning to construct it on the playing field and Park area where most individuals go for the relaxing and to get in touch with nature.
However
, I have a suggestion that you might like to consider you should start new construction on the east side of the city where barren land is available as it will not only be cheaper for you to acquire but will
also
 be greatly beneficial for the community as no one has started any projects there and new population can reside there but any issues. Hope you will take my consideration in your view. Yours sincerely, Raj Sharma
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task achievement
Expand on the explanation of how you know about the plans. Providing a bit more detail will strengthen your task response.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single clear idea and that the ideas flow logically from one paragraph to the next.
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The letter appropriately addresses the problem and provides a clear suggestion for a solution.
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The tone of the letter is suitably formal and polite, which is appropriate for writing to a local authority.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriately used, maintaining a formal tone.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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