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In some countries, the government promotes public transport as the primary means of transportation and discourages private vehicle ownership. Do you think the benefits of this policy outweigh the disadvantages?

certain nations, public
transport
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 has been upgraded by governments as the main mode of
transportation
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besides
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, they prevent over owing private vehicles. I believe that the benefits of promoting public
transport
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 and discouraging private
vehicle
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 ownership outweigh the disadvantages. Some say, there may be some disadvantages,
such
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 as longer
travel
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 times and lack of convenience in some cases.
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, public
transportation
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 often requires multiple transfers and a longer
travel
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 time compared to driving directly to a destination.
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, if you need to get to a location
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 not directly served by a bus or train route, you may have to take a combination of buses and trains to get there, which can take significantly longer than driving by car.
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, public
transport
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 schedules may not always align with individual needs, and wait times at stations likely take up your time . It is justifiably argued promoting public
transport
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 can increase mobility and
access
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 to
transportation
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 for those who cannot afford a private
vehicle
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. The government can create a card for using public
transportation
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 .
This
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 allows individuals who may not have
access
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 to a private
vehicle
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 to still be able to
travel
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 around the city and
access
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 public amenities without having to own and maintain a car.
This
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 can be seen in cities like TEHRAN, where residents can apply for discounted
travel
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 passes if they meet certain income requirements.
This
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 not only increases mobility but
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 helps individuals on lower incomes use public
transportation
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 and essential services. In conclusion,
although
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 private
vehicle
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 ownership is discouraged in favour of public
transportation
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, governments are actively improving public
transportation
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 services. In my opinion, the advantages of discouraging private
vehicle
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 usage far outweigh the disadvantages,
such
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 as increased mobility and
access
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 to
transportation
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 for individuals who do not own vehicles.
However
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, the use of public
transportation
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 can sometimes result in longer
travel
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 times to reach a destination.

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Coherence and Cohesion
Try to improve the logical flow between paragraphs by emphasizing transitions and the links between your main points.
Task Achievement
Consider adding more specific examples and data to further strengthen your argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
You have structured your essay with a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps clarify your main argument.
Task Achievement
Your ideas are generally clear and comprehensive, covering the main benefits and some potential drawbacks of promoting public transport.
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