Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

#people #situation #job #shortage #money #situations

It is irrefutable that nothing is permanent, neither any

situation

nor the pain. Some people believe that everyone should contain their self in continuously living in the

situation

they are, in terms of their job satisfaction and low wages. While I believe, working against it and making a better life for oneself should be everyone's priority.

First

and Foremost, Hard work is the key to success. No one can achieve success overnight, It takes years of dedication in a certain field to attain heights.

For example

, Jeff Bezos started amazon from his garage, leaving his job at wall street and it took him 20 years to become what he is now. It is because, he was aware of the changes he is bringing and the long term plan he had.

Also

, one should try to become a better version of themselves,

this

will really help them in improving their current condition.

As a result

, they would be able to do things with passion, creating a better living for themselves.

On the other hand

, accepting one's current

situation

is something great, but not trying to change it is immature.

For instance

, a physically handicapped person, accepts he won't be able to walk,

then

no doctor can help him. It is because he has considered himself as a handicapped person.

In contrast

, if he challenges himself and shows will to walk, he might fall few times, but will be able to walk breaking all odds. As a consequence, everyone should challenge their

situation

, cause if you won't challenge, it won't change. In conclusion, despite people accepting their situations. In my opinions, no

situation

this

world is big enough. If someone has a will, he can move mountains.

Therefore

, individuals should take things into their hands and always try to improve their condition with sheer hard work and patience.

Tue Dec 10 2019

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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10Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

307 words

8.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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