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Many people work longer hours, leaving little time for leisure activities.ther hand, Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages?

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It has been observed that employees have been working more
then
 the required hours because of which they are not getting time for personal activities. In my opinion, people are working long hours for their own benefit, but they are forgetting that
this
 is affecting their health and social
life
.
This
 has more disadvantages and less advantages. Employees often
work
 for long hour's if they have an approaching deadline, they need promotion and if appraisal's are near. I have seen employees just sitting in offices doing absolutely nothing when appraisals are near. They just sit around so that their bosses can see how hard working the employee is, that he is sitting in an office at late hours
also
.
This
 is the only advantage a person can get from working long hours.
On the other hand
, there are many disadvantages of working long hours. People who
work
 late, are often the ones with no social
life
 and no social presence. They don't develop their personalities after office hour's. These people are working late hours and due to which they get severe eye damage or backbone damages by sitting in a chair for more than 10 hours. These people have the worst
work
life
 balance because of
this
 their relationship with other people
also
 suffers. In conclusion, having a normal
work
life
 balance is an important aspect of
life
, it can help employees live a healthy
life
. So
instead
 of, working long hours in office an employee should
work
 on developing his personality.
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