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I am writing to expect your help about my willingness to work in head office for six months as I need to be trained about newly implemented ERP system recently in this branch.

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I have written to expect your help about my willingness to work in
head
office
 for six months as I need to be trained about the newly implemented
ERP
system
 recently in the branch. We have been working on legacy software for many years and we are habituated on the
system
. Recently a new
ERP
system
 implemented as per organizational decision. Unexpectedly, no training has been provided us on the new
system
.
On the other hand
 legacy
system
 has been stopped while the new
system
 started. In
this
 situation, we all employees are facing many problems to operate new
ERP
 by self-learning. In that case I am willing to work in
head
office
 for training purpose on
ERP
. When I will be in
head
office
, in absence of me, one of my colleague named Mr. Abid Hassan (EmployeeID: 20190), Assistant MIS officer, will act as team lead on behalf of me. I talked to him about the responsibility and he agreed with me. So, for the better uninterrupted operation of the branch, it will be helpful if you arrange me the working facility in
head
office
 for six months. Sincerely yours MD. Masud Iqbal
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