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1- Films and computer games which contain violence are very popular. Some people believe they have a negative effect on society and so should be banned. Other people, however, say they are just harmless and help people to relax. Discuss both these points of view and give your opinion.

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We are living in a 21st century where people give great importance to
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entertainment
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entertain
 in their hectic schedule. Some people consider movies and computer games which contain violence should be banned where as some people consider it’s a way to relax their
mind
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 after a busy day. In
this
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 essay we will discuss both the view and describe which one is better Most of the people in our generation prefer indoor
entertainment
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such
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 as movies, computer games and indoor games. Whereas some of the
game
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 consist of violence or fighting. After a hectic day at work people always need a peace of
mind
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 where they can relax and spend some time with them. Most of the people watch
movie
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movies
a movie
 or play games.
where
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Where
 some of the games contain violence where is definitely
create
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creating
 and adverse effect on the
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person
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person's
mind
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 and his behaviour. Example: In recent time one of the
game
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 PUPG was really famous and played globally due to which it had
adverse effect
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an adverse effect
adverse effects
 on
person
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mind
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. They become
bit
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a bit
 aggressive in nature and short tempered in behaviour On the other had
side
being the one previously mentioned or spoken of
said
 some of the people consider games and movies are just for
entertainment
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 and it does not impact
someone
any person
anyone
person
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 life and stability at all. They take movies and games just as a part of life and consider it as
entertainment
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. Example: Some people like action movies and they prefer watching action movies compared to other movies.
Well it
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Well, it
 completely depends on
person
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 to
person
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 how they consider Violence movies and games and they take it. As per my
opinion there
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opinion, there
 should be set age for any
game
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 and
movie which
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movie, which
 should be restricted to
specific audience
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specific audiences
a specific audience
. If
audience
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the audience
an audience
 is mature enough to consider movie or
game
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 as
entertainment
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,
then
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 it will not impact anyone mental and physical health. So
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 don’t think we should
banned
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ban
 or restrict any movies or
game
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.

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