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Some people believe that modern technology is increasing the gap between rich and poor people. Discuss both views and your opinion.

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Technology is constantly advancing and reshaping people’s lives that affected us in various ways. While others accept the fact that technology had widened the gap between fortunate and unfortunate people, I argue that it is the opposite. Admittedly, in the past years, the division between rich and poor people can be widely seen among groups of people.
For instance
, the ownership of luxurious Apple products by m
ost rich
Suggestion
richer
people was commonly viewed as a symbol of being in an upper class of society, due to its popularity and high value. Those who do not belong in
this
 group were being neglected and c
asted
put or send forth
cast
away from the social circle as their lifestyle do not fit in. Despite of
this
, t
echnology
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the technology
entered in as y
ears
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the years
passed by, allowing everyone in the society to infiltrate the world of the wealthy. To give a clear example, the use of online stock market became easily accessible to the market at minimum fees due to its availability on the internet. Online video trainings can be conveniently viewed in social media accounts
such
 as Facebook and YouTube. Signing-up as a member is a stress-free task as
this
 can be done on websites too, unlike in the previous years where rich people can only benefit.
In addition
, travelling to another country can now be experienced by normal people, due to w
ide range
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a wide range
the wide range
of choices of affordable plans offered by travel agencies online and due to the upgraded design of new planes which can accommodate more passengers with lesser fuel consumption. In conclusion,
although
 technology has provided a gap between wealthy and deprived people in the past, I firmly believe that it has now created a bridge between these people,
thus
, reducing the gap of the societies they live in and improving lives even
further
.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • socio-economic status
  • wealth inequality
  • infrastructure
  • tech-enhanced learning
  • automate
  • low-skill jobs
  • digital platforms
  • mobile banking
  • financial services
  • e-commerce
  • democratizing
  • marginalized
  • public-private partnerships
  • digital literacy
  • social entrepreneurs
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