In some area of the US, a ‘curfew’ is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion on this?

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Teenagers are the
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the time yet to come
future
citizens
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of
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any country. US has
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a principle that limits the extent of something
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on movement of teenagers in some areas. They are not allowed outdoors without an accompanying adult after a particular time in the night. In my
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opinion, this
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practice is very unlawful and it amounts to stifling of basic human rights in the country, in
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essay, I would
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Free
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Freedom
movement and free speech are the basic rights bestowed on the citizens by the government. A person irrespective of age, caste, gender is free to move until and unless he is not a criminal. Targeting teenagers and imposing
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curfew
on them, would mount to discrimination and it goes against the basic tenets to human rights. There could be emergencies, a person might be returning from work or study and restricting them would mean discrimination. Teenagers are not small children to have adult supervision at all times.
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, there may be few instances which warrant certain restrictions, like in case of any rioting or widespread outrage and protests. In these special situations movement of teenagers can be restricted for a temporary amount of time to control the situation and bring it back to normal. Recently in India there were massive protests by teenagers regarding rise fees, the government
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ordered a curfew for
few weeks
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a few weeks
, to control widespread protests. Once the issue subsided,
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the government
lifted the curfew on them. In conclusion, a person irrespective of age, gender and religion is free to move anytime and can’t
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restrict
,
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take exception to
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for in
few cases
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a few cases
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