Some people believe that children's time outside of school should be filled with scheduled activities such as art and music classes and sports. others feel that children need free time to play and relax. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

There are opposing views about whether in free
time
student should have more activities or spending their leisure times for playing and relaxing. While
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
understand why some people support the former view,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
am still in favour of the latter.
people
Suggestion
People
who argue
time
children should be
take
Suggestion
taking
part in outdoor activities have their own reasons. From their point of view,
chhildren
a young person of either sex
children
have a lot of
ennergy
(physics) a thermodynamic quantity equivalent to the capacity of a physical system to do work; the units of energy are joules or ergs
energy
so they can study more lesson after studying formal knowledge.
In other words
, the ability of children is unlimited. Another point to be made is that more lessons will help students
to have
Suggestion
have
more chance of graduating with flying colours
.
Accept space
.
As a
results
Suggestion
result
.
Accept space
.
they
Suggestion
They
may get a well-paid job.
Nevertheless
,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
still side with those who believe
children's spare
Suggestion
the children's spare time
time
is for relaxing.
This
due to the fact that children have more
time
.
Accept space
.
Another reason to be given is that children are a human so
their
people in general
they
need
time
for playing. In conclusion, despite acknowledging why
pepl
(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively
people
e think children need study mor
e
Accept space
,
,
refers to the speaker or writer
I
i hold believe that children need free
time
for relaxing

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