Doing an enjoyable activity with a child can develop better skills and more creativity than reading. To what extent do you agree? Use reasons and specific examples to explain your answer.

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Doing an enjoyable activity with a child can develop better skills and more creativity than reading.I agree with
this
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,
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,
one can relieve from the stress and tensions after playing with their kids.
Now a days
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Nowadays
the lifestyle of the human beings
become
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becomes
mechanical and they are not able to manage the
time
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for the family and the career at the same
time
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.
This
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is leading to the deteriorating of the health and in some cases leads to depression and heart attacks.In order to reduce the family and work tensions
,
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,
one
have
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has
to take
time
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and have to spend
time
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with their
kids which
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kids, which
helps both child and parents in
apositive
Suggestion
a positive
way. I have observed so many
celebraties
a widely known person
celebrities
who were always happy and energetic even at the age of
sixties
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the sixties
and seventies and successfully running their
multi national
involving or operating in several nations or nationalities
multinational
companies
.
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.
Most of these
rockstars
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rock stars
have mentioned in their interviews they spend an appropriate
time
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with their
grand children
a child of your son or daughter
grandchildren
.
For
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example most
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example, most
recently I read an article about
mukesh
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Mukesh
ambani
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Ambani
who is the most famous person in the world
,
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,
by having multiple
bussiness
a commercial or industrial enterprise and the people who constitute it
businesses
business
in many sectors and industries, he said in the
discussion he
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discussion, he
likes to spend
time
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with the small kids
atleast
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at least
once in a week, to take
rest
Suggestion
a rest
from all the hectic work and schedules.He
also
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said that playing with kids increases the memory power and contemplates to get better thoughts and creative way of thinking
.
Accept space
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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