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Some people say that the internet is bringing people together by making the world smaller. Do you agree that the internet is making it easier for people to communicate with one another

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Its
Suggestion
It's
 often argued that the
internet
 reduces the distances among people around the
world
 and brings them together, thereby making the
world
 smaller.
This
 essay agrees with
this
 statement because the
internet
 is an excellent way of communication with family and friends and to arrange a business meeting by
video
 calling.
Firstly
, people can easily communicate with family and friends on the
internet
 calling. In recent years there are many apps which
works
Suggestion
work
 with
internet
 are the best and
the most cheaper
Suggestion
the cheapest
the most cheap
the most cheapest
 way to make calls and talk with your loved ones around the
world
. Especially for the students who are abroad for higher studies from their home town can easily communicate with their parents under their limited budget.
Secondly
,
Accept space
,
these days, business meetings and conferences are arranged via
video
 calling. That's the most efficient and cost-effective way for the cooperate to liaisons with their business fraternity around the
world
 and makes their plans
accordingly
.
For example
, these days, immigration interviews can conduct via
video
 calling rather than go to London, where the majority of immigration offices are located. Thankfully now the problem has solved, and interviews can be conducted via
video
 calls.
to
Suggestion
To
 summarize
,
Accept space
,
 I agree that the
internet
 is the most affordable and super efficient source of communication.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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