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Today, more and more students are deciding to move to a different country for higher studies. Do you think that benefit of this outweighs the problem?

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The number of students who prefer overseas for continuing
the higher
Suggestion
the high
 level of studies has increased recently.
This
 essay will describe the advantages and the disadvantages of
this
 trend. On the one hand, there are two major benefits of taking university education abroad.
Firstly
, students could gain more experience and better knowledge.
This
 means they would meet new people and adjust to new environments or new cultures that are different from their hometowns.
Also
, they could gain more excellent skills because the top universities provide more qualified lecturers and laboratories to support the students’ experiments generally.
Secondly
, students could promote their nations. In the other words, being a successful person in foreign countries could make people have good perspectives on the students’ nationality, even it would attract them to visit the regions.
On the other hand
, two main drawbacks could be resulted.
First
, scholars could not want to go back to their homes. Because the facilities and the jobs that are offered by the local companies could influence them to stay, it causes them to forget their duties in contributing to their nations.
This
 can be seen by the growing number of Indians or Indonesians who are successful in inventing things, while their nations are still undeveloped.
Second
, choosing the university overseas could spend the expensive cost. To illustrate, students who study in foreign countries usually are financed by the government,
although
 the budget could be allocated
for
Suggestion
to
 expanding the local universities. All in all, in my opinion, move to other countries for studying higher education could give
people many
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people, many
 goods that could overcome the problems, if the students donate their skills to their homelands.
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