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People today know fewer of their neighbours than in the past. Why is this? What can be done to solve this problem?

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Earlier neighbours were as important as a family member, but now the trend has been changed. Today only
few people
Suggestion
a few people
 take interest to know their neighbours. Moving from
one
city
 to another very often and changing of people’s mindset are to be blamed. In order to bring about a change, we need to make an effort to socialize with the neighbours.
Firstly
, changing of today’s work culture, in which
one
 has to move too
frequent
Suggestion
frequently
 from
one
city
 to another is the main cause. Everybody wants to work in a multinational corporation, and these companies’ offices are located in every major metropolitan
city
. These companies
seldom transfer
Suggestion
are seldom transferring
 their employees from
one
 branch to another. Due to
this
, they have to change their
city
 very often than in the past,
as a result
, they are less interested to make a bond with their neighbours. Another reason is, these days people have become money minded. They feel that money can buy everything from education, healthcare, and entertainment and they do not want anyone to support from outside of their homes.
On the other hand
, I would argue that people should make some effort to know their neighbours. If you know the person from
next
 door, they can be a great help in case of an emergency.
Moreover
, there should be cultural events or get together in neighbourhoods.
As a result
, they will have
better bond
Suggestion
a better bond
 with their neighbours.
For example
, I am a resident of a society, where we usually celebrate from Christmas to Depawali altogether and I personally know all of the members of my society. In conclusion, we have become more self-
centered
being or placed in the center
centred
 due to work and shifting from
one
 place to another quite frequent To solve
this
 issue, we need to make an effort to know them and make a bond where we live, as they can be of a great help in bad times.

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