Doctors in many countries believe that people are not getting enough exercise. What might be causing this lack of exercise? What can be done to address the issue?

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consultants believe that today's generation is not doing enough physical activity
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pressure in offices is considered to be one of the main reasons for absence of physical activity in lifestyle
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for 15 hours daily without any break
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should organize sports events to make sure everyone is in good
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the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercise
regularly and feel energized.
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