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Some people think it is more important to spend time in developing a successful career while others think it is more important to spend time with friends and family. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Some people opine that spending hours in enhancing the knowledge to have an outstanding path for the future are more significant, while others believe that being with friends and family is important. Whilst a discussion of both these views is worthwhile, I am a supporter of the former view. On the one hand, people spend
time
 to improve their skills will aid them to take care of their family.
In other words
, when they are educated and performing their task without any issues will get better payment at their work.
Furthermore
, it will make them to develop their ability to earn more and provide good education for their children as well as care for their elders.
For example
, people working in the software industry will work hard for better remuneration to fulfil their family needs. In my opinion, I agree that spending, quality of
time
 in nourishing their talent will enormously help them financially to support their family.
On the other hand
, it is vital to spend days with peers and kins will help in difficult situations.
That is
 to say that they are the energy booster for the people who are unable to handle more stress.
In addition
, they will guide right path to plan for a successful career.
For instance
, in India most of the people in the countryside, spend more
time
 with their neighbours and relatives to rejuvenate their body and mind.
However
, I do not support
this
 notion as without the populace's interest in developing their career by their own will provide inverse effect. In conclusion,
although
 spending
time
 with friends and family members will aid them in critical situations, I think that it has to be utilised by improving their talent for their future.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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