IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5

There is an increasing trend around the world to have a small family rather than a large family.What are the advantage and disadvantages of having a small family rather than a large family?

#trend #world #advantage
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Globally, there is
high rate
Suggestion
a high rate
 of having
small clan
Suggestion
a small clan
 than raising a big clan. Having limited unit as a family is profitable owing to quality education and better parental
relationship but
Accept comma addition
relationship, but
, there are
also
 some demerits to
this
effects
Suggestion
effect
 which will be
apprise
Suggestion
apprised
. One major merit of having a small clan is
high quality
Suggestion
the high quality
 of
parental relationship
Suggestion
the parental relationship
. No doubt that having little family will create more attention towards the children and other cogent issues of the family.
In addition
,
Accept space
,
better education for the offsprings and healthy living of the whole unit in terms of good food and clothings.
Furthermore
,
this
reduce
Suggestion
reduces
rate
Suggestion
the rate
 of unemployment in our society
also
 reducing housing problems in our environment.
Consequently
, the rate of vagabonds will be reduced as many parents will have intimate time for their product so as to give them good names in the society.
Moreso
,
Accept space
,
there will be peace in the community.
On the other hand
,
Accept space
,
a major issue of family in a smaller size is inability to relate well with the outside world. In relation to
this
, most
product
Suggestion
products
 of
this
 family find it difficult to commute in the environment because they are keen to
there
of them or themselves
their
 limited lifestyle thereby
,
Accept space
,
creating enmities.
Also
,
Accept space
,
they are lazy to rational thinking
this
 is to the effect of their parent coming through for them in situations.
In addition
,
product
Suggestion
the product
 of
this
 tends to spend lavishly.
Moreover
,
Accept space
,
recent research by IMF shows that children from small family
small lavishly
Accept comma addition
small, lavishly
 compare
to
being one more than one
two
 breeds from
big family
Suggestion
a big family
big families
. In conclusion
,
Accept space
,
while having a minute family has merit in many ways
,
Accept space
,
also
 there should be a higher consciousness of it demerit like insecurity and money management which could be hazardous.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • Demographic trends
  • Family planning
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Birth rate
  • Population growth
  • Child-rearing
  • Single-child policy
  • Work-life balance
  • Sustainable living
  • Intergenerational support
What to do next:
Look at other essays: