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There is an increasing trend around the world to have a small family rather than a large family. What are the advantages and disadvantages of having a small family rather than a large family.

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Nowadays, people often thought that it is of great value to have a nuclear family
instead
 of having an extended family. Raising up a small family is beneficial owing to the reduction of chaos and misunderstanding in the family
,
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 and it lowers the amount of money spent on tuition fees but there are drawbacks to be taken into account. One major benefit of having a smaller family is that there will be few times when the family will experience misunderstanding amongst
themselves which
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themselves, which
 reduces a child’s tendency of being aggressive in the future.
For instance
, in 2015,
UNICEF outcome
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the UNICEF outcome
in
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of
 their research states that 70 percent of stubborn children are raised in an extended home.
Additionally
, the amount of money
that is
 required to cater for a child’s education and the domestic needs will be minimal, thereby, saving up so much for the family.
This
 will enable them to boost their
wealth status
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wealth, status
 in the society. Which is
as a result
 of them having few financial responsibilities to deal with in the family.
On the other hand
,
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,
 a major issue with small family is that
parent
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a parent
the parent
parents
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gives
 so much love and care
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for
of
 their children because there are few of them.
This
will
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will, however
however
 lead to a child finding it so difficult to be independent when they become adult.
This
 has often times led to a negative outcome in their adulthood. Another disadvantage is that small family reduces the success tendency in a home, because parent most times limit the children from doing what they love but
instead
 what their parent expects of them. In conclusion, while smaller family is advantageous to the society, people should be aware of the setback
such
 as lack of
independency
freedom from control or influence of another or others
independence
 children face when they become adult and their inability to decide for themselves in their personal life goal.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Financial stability
  • Living standards
  • Concentrated resources
  • Parent-child bonding
  • Upbringing
  • Environmental sustainability
  • Carbon footprint
  • Supportive network
  • Cooperation
  • Multigenerational
  • Cultural traditions
  • Agricultural communities
  • Loneliness
  • Social competencies
  • Financial strain
  • Resource dilution
  • Education opportunities
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