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You took your family to a nearby restaurant. You were disappointed with the meal and wish to complain to the manager. Write a letter to the manager of the restaurant. In your letter, » explain why you were at the restaurant » describe the problems » write about the action you want the manager to take Write at least 150 words.

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Dear sir/madam, I am writing to express my total dissatisfaction and frustration with the quality of food that I had during my visit to the restaurant with my family
last
 weekend.
Firstly
, I would like to inform you that, it was a very special event for all of us
,
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 because we were celebrating the anniversary of my parents, and we decided to have dinner. But, unfortunately, it changed from being a celebration to a real big problem,
as a result
 of the horrible taste of food, we chose four main traditional dishes, and waited for almost
forty five
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 minutes to get them,
in addition
, the food was cold and the taste was imperfect which make all of us disappointed and we took the decision to go.
As a result
 of
such
 situation, I need from you to take
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disciplinary action with the whole staff, to keep the reputation of the place. Your fast action is highly appreciated. Sincerely
Pavly
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Pauly
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

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