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Some people believe that the government should make university education free for all. Others disagree and say students should pay for their own education. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is widely claimed that costs for
the higher
Suggestion
higher
 education of all students should be covered by the government.
However
, opponents of
such
 an idea
also
 exist with their arguments put forward, which
also
 should be closely examined from various perspectives as well as the points of view of the
first
 group.
To begin
 with, the proponents of the full tuition provided by the
government
Suggestion
Government
 supports their view with some important reasons. Among them is the fact that students, who do not need to work in order to earn money, additional to financial aid by their parents, for everyday living expenses, could spend most of their precious time on learning any advantageous skill or taking extra classes to advance their knowledge.
Also
, it is crucial to keep in mind that making university classes free for everyone could be an effective tool in enhancing the average level of knowledge of the country,
thus
, even those with
the poorest
Suggestion
the poor
 financial conditions would be able to afford themselves to study at the local universities.
However
, another group of people, who disapprove of the fully covered college education prices, base their opinion on other understandable reasons.
First
 of all, they take into account the simplest psychological phenomenon which cites that in the case of unpaid education, the majority of persons would not be satisfied by obtained knowledge from free courses, and thereby, learners' motivation to study could either grow or go down, but in most cases would decline, according to statistical data.
In addition
 to
this
, it would be much more reasonable to make funding based on the student's academic capabilities which are often reflected by student's high school GPA or even other factors. With the above-mentioned pieces of evidence in mind, I strongly support the process of the thorough assessment of whether the student deserves full financial aid.
However
, most of the students should be provided with financial aid partially.

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