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In the modern world, schools are no longer necessary because there is so much information available through internet, that they can just as well study at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#world #schools #information #internet #study #home
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Education
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 is the mandatory part of the life and demand of
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 modern society. Being educated means an overall development of a human socially and mentally. Mode of
education
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also
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 has a vast role in building up an educated individual, the most common and familiar is school. Schools are the basic, traditional and an effective mode of spreading the light of
education
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. In the history of the thousand years, schools are the best in teaching knowledge as well as moral values to the pupils.
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The institution
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 makes a pupil ready for his future with a positive attitude and skills to survive in the challenging world.
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 to it, a person becomes competitive and adjustable.
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, the advent of the computers and the
internet
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 has modernized the
education
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 system. Already computers have replaced books up to a great extent and
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 target seems to be schools.
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, nowadays
education
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 is much easier and accessible and the whole credit goes to
internet
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.
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, without school it is hard for a pupil to get proper knowledge of the survival in the society. The real scene of learning competition and hard work can be played with proper direction in the schools only.
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, without school a student can study on
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internet
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the internet
 and become a knowledgeable man, but it is impossible to become a successful gentleman. Considering the matter in fair light the advancement and need of computers for study cannot be doubted, the role of schools is
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 indispensable even in
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 modern world. Discussing the fact,
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internet
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the internet
 is an e-world
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 an imaginary world.
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