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Immigration has a major impact on society. What are the main reasons? What consequences it can lead?

#immigration #impact #society #consequences
Immigration
 is defined as
movement
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the movement
 of people across
country border even
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country borders, even
country borders even
the country border even
 continents in
attempt
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an attempt
 to improve
leaving
the experience of being alive; the course of human events and activities
living
 condition. While some immigrants leave home
country
 in
prospect
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the prospect
 of new
jobbs
the principal activity in your life that you do to earn money
jobs
, the others are forced to leave by war, hunger or natural events.
Finally there
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Finally, there
are
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is
 a
third
 group of so called luxuries emigrants who are attracted to another
country
 by its nature
,
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,
low
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lower
 prices or better climate.
l
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L
 In past the
immigration
 was desirable
,
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,
 especially in
western world where
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the western world, where
the western world where
a western world where
 immigrants were embraced cause their knowledge, skills and abilities to work hard. Unfortunately the
immigration
 that
hav happened
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has happened
have happened
 the las couple of years are unwonted even
thou
(postpositive) however
though
 considered
at
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as
huge political problem
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a huge political problem
 How it happened that
immigration
 from
once important tool
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the once important tool
 in western economy became a
treat
something that is a source of danger
threat
 to the welfare.
Lets
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Let's
 look
first
 on positive aspects of
immigration
. In many years the
immigration
 improves economy and demographic map.
Moreover immigrants
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Moreover, immigrants
 introduce and disseminated their culture and tradition. Not to
mentioned
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mention
 how the food map of western world became divers thank to
immigration
.
Furthermore
successful integration
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the successful integration
 of immigrants in society
enforce
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enforces
 the democracy and
altruisme
the quality of unselfish concern for the welfare of others
altruism
.
On the other hand
immigration
 has
it
it is
it's
 negative consequences
First
 the countries with a high proportion of emigration are facing a decline in population.
Second
 the educated people are most likely to live
country
 which leads to decries of income and aggravation of
economy
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the economy
. Immigrants who nowadays entering
borders
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the borders
 of the EU are treated as enemies to welfare
.
Accept space
.
Moreover some
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Moreover, some
 EU countries
gos
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go
goes
 even
further
 in
protection
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the protection
 of
they
of them or themselves
their
 borders by building the wall.
In
addition
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addition, immigration
immigration
 is misused as terrifying argument in
hands
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the hands
 of right wing
partis
an organization to gain political power
parties
, pictured as
rules
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ruling
 as a burden to the social system. Even if the immigrants manage to
gett
come into the possession of something concrete or abstract
get
got
 to the final destination they chance of success in
new
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a new country
new countries
the new country
country
 are quite low.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic migration
  • Asylum seeker
  • Diaspora
  • Expatriate
  • Refugee status
  • Work permit/visa
  • Demographic shift
  • Naturalization
  • Xenophobia
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Multiculturalism
  • Social cohesion
  • Immigration policies
  • Border control
  • Undocumented immigrants
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