In many countries, children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility.

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It is often argued, children should start to do some paid jobs to get precious working knowledge and
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while others feel that it is entirely unacceptable.
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essay believes that children should not do any
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job, at
least during their initial 16years of their life and should be dedicated to their studies. Some would say that by working paid jobs, they will not only earn money, but the
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which helps them to choose their future career.
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to say that, by implementing that working
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child
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can determine which degree course or business will be beneficial in the future to earn more money.
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, a recent survey found that in Pakistan around 10% of brick industry owners admit that, they used to work as a
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someone who works with their hands; someone engaged in manual labor
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in a brick factory as a
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and made their mind to pursue the same business in adult life.
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, I believe that
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is a wrong approach, children's brains are very fertile, and
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should be used for studies only not for work. While others believe that children should not permit to work because they shall have to complete their education
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before to start any paid job. When a
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begins working, their mind will divert from studies, and a chance of quitting will be highly likely;
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, it will be difficult for a kid to go back to school.
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, Cambridge University found in a recent survey; around 30% of boys and girls did not go back to school once started doing paid jobs at their young ages.
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Therefore, this
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essay believes that children should complete their education
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. In conclusion, I believe,
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getting a working
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earlier in life can be beneficial, but education should be the priority for every
child
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in the world.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Child labor
  • Exploitation
  • Minimum age
  • Work experience
  • Survival
  • Taking responsibility
  • Education
  • Poverty
  • Legal restrictions
  • Physical toll
  • Psychological impact
  • Cultural perceptions
  • International conventions
  • Economic impact
  • Work-study programs
  • Skilled labor
  • Unskilled labor
  • Developing economies
  • Moral implications
  • Professional development
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