Some parents think computer games are better for children and they should be allowed to play more of them. whereas some parents argue that they are harmful to children.Do you think advantages outweight disadvantages.

It is often argued that many
parent
Suggestion
parents
permit their children to play
computer
games because they believe that
this
will help to build their technical skills. I think that, sitting in front of the
computer
and playing games in an early developing years of life has more disadvantages than benefits because
this
is not only harmful to children's eyesight but can
also
responsible for indulging their offspring into criminal activities.
To begin
with, watching a
computer
screen for a more extended time will create a negative impact on a
child
's vision. Much research has proved that specific kinds of blue
color
a visual attribute of things that results from the light they emit or transmit or reflect
colour
coloured
light are emitting from the graphics which usually use in creating games and,
this
may damage the particular cells, "rods and cones" in the eye which are responsible for vision.
For example
, a recent survey conducted by the British medical council on the children who are wearing eye correction lenses. They found among them over 25% of those who are spending plenty of time playing
computer
games and sitting in front of the screen and moving their eyeball continuously.
Furthermore
, some web games which many children enjoy to play have violent content which are responsible for making a
child
's criminal. Regularly playing
such
games will slowly and gradually embed the negative and antisocial
behaviors
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
in them.
For example
, some game has a rule that when a player shoots a person, will get points.
As a result
, the
child
is slowly implementing
this
rule in their lives.
For instance
,
Accept space
,
the Indian police solved a triple murder case
last
year, where they found out a group of children shooting people to obtain points because they were playing similar games on the
computer
. In conclusion, I believe that despite incorporating technical skills,
computer
games create many negative impacts on the
child
physically as well as mentally.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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