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Some people believe that price is the only consideration when buying something. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your opinion and include relevant examples.

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Nowadays,
price
 as only consideration when buying is becoming popular among
certain section
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certain sections
a certain section
 of society. These people claim that more the
price
 better the product will be in terms of quality.
This
 essay will argue why
price
 is not the only area to be considered while buying and how other factors are equally important in
this
 decision. Expensive things are better in quality and durability has always been mindset of some people. They are justifiably worried that possessing things that are not costly will have
negative impact
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a negative impact
 on their status in society. People care about their image in society. In their quest to impress
others they
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others, they
 often purchase things by going
in
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into
 debt.
Study
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A study
 by a recent Business magazine revealed that 70% of the credit card purchases are
done
produced by a manufacturing process
made
 for high end products. So why
price
 should not be only a factor while purchasing? Before buying anything, proper research and time should be spent in terms of identifying the value it is providing for the money being spent. Shopkeepers have known for long that people tend to consider expensive things as best and
hence
 have been exploiting
this
 for their own benefit.
Recent survey
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A recent survey
 by a well-known magazine has found that 60% of the product value comes from branding exercise. Companies try to recover the advertisement amount they spent from customer by charging them more. Lesser known brand can offer same or better quality and durability than the well-known brand.
Hence
, it is in the interest of customer to think and make any decision and not to succumb to shopping impulses. In conclusion, I think
price
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the price
 should not be the only deciding factor, people have to plan and research before making any decision on buying expensive products or services to avoid problems in future if they cannot afford it.
Submitted by hiteshkhodani on

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