In many countries, children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility. discuss both views and give your opinions on this issue?

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Some would argue that children should start doing some paid jobs to obtain precious working knowledge and
experience
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, while others feel that it is completely unacceptable and inappropriate.
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essay believes that
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working
experience
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acquired in early
life
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can be an asset for the future.
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, children should not have to do any
job at
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job, at
least during their initial eighteen years of
life
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and should be dedicated their time entirely to their studies. On the one hand, some people feel that by working
paid jobs
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to pay, jobs
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they will not only earn
money but
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money, but
the
experience
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which helps them to choose their future career. Because by implementing the gained knowledge helps the pupil to determine what to choose, like,
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studies, or business in the future for a living.
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, a recent survey found that in Pakistan around 20% of brick industry owners admit that, they used to work as a
laborurer
someone who works with their hands; someone engaged in manual labor
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in a brick factory as a child and made their mind to pursue the same business in adult
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.
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, I believe that
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is a wrong approach; children's brains are very fertile;
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, they should focus on their studies only.
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, some say that children should not permit to work because they must have to complete their education
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. When an adolescent starts working, their mind will divert from studies to earn money, and chances of quitting studies will be highly likely;
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, it will be difficult for a kid to go back to school.
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, a recent survey by Cambridge University found out, in the USA, around 40% of boys and girls did not go back to school once started doing paid jobs at their young age.
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Therefore
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Therefore, this
this
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essay believes that children should complete their education
first
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. In conclusion, I believe,
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getting a working
experience
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earlier in
life
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can be beneficial;
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, education should be the priority for every child in the world.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Child labor
  • Exploitation
  • Minimum age
  • Work experience
  • Survival
  • Taking responsibility
  • Education
  • Poverty
  • Legal restrictions
  • Physical toll
  • Psychological impact
  • Cultural perceptions
  • International conventions
  • Economic impact
  • Work-study programs
  • Skilled labor
  • Unskilled labor
  • Developing economies
  • Moral implications
  • Professional development
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