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Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic? What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

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Now a day most of the tourists
are preferring
Suggestion
prefer
 visiting places where conditions are difficult,
such
 as Sahara desert or the Antartic than other visiting places like Buddhist Temple
,
Accept space
,
forts and beaches. Most of tourists
such
 as below 40 ages people are likes to visit hard situation destinies to explore more things and enjoy the adventure
trip
.
Accept space
.
 Most of the tourists loved to
visiting
Suggestion
visit
have visited
 those places for more than weeks so that they will enjoy the same, love to stay at camp in night time during the
trip
 and most important is analysis more
.
Accept space
.
 Now a
days
Suggestion
day
 most of the tourists capture the video of the entire
trip
 for the future
refference
a remark that calls attention to something or someone
reference
references
 of friends and families during the
trip
. Sometimes visitors face some difficulties due to
this
advanture
a wild and exciting undertaking (not necessarily lawful)
adventure
trip
 and some of the people already lost their
life
Suggestion
lives
 during the
trip
 due to
nuture
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natural
nature
nurture
mature
 disaster issue
such
 as landscaping, heavy
rain fall
water falling in drops from vapor condensed in the atmosphere
rainfall
 and
earth quake
shaking and vibration at the surface of the earth resulting from underground movement along a fault plane or from volcanic activity
earthquake
. Apart from that, some of
tourist
Suggestion
the tourist
 having some critical health concerns and those men or female, faced sudden health issues during the campaign
such
 as health attack, Bone weakness and oxygen issues.
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