In many countries, children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience. Discuss both opinions and give your opinion.

I
n
Suggestion
With
large numbers of c
ountries
Suggestion
country's
children are allowed to do
work
against payment. Some argue that juveniles should not do any kind of
work
, while others think that working in
childhood
increases experience.
This
essay completely agrees with
this
statement,
although
it is tough for children to do study and
work
at the same time, it makes them physically and mentally strong for the future. On the one hand, a handful of people believe child l
abor
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
should not be encouraged because doing
work
and study at the same time is not an easy task for a child.
That is
to say that young people are not strong enough to perform both tasks. Children should be freed from any kind of responsibilities so they can enjoy their
childhood
and focus on their studies better.
For example
, the same decision has been taken in Bangladesh in 2012 and it resulted in the increased number of children started going to school.
However
, sometimes children are forced to
work
b
y
Suggestion
in
the financial position of the house, so they have to
work
to pay their bills.
On the other hand
, some believe that
work
experience of doing
work
in the
childhood
benefitted a lot in the later stages of life.
In other words
, a child who works in their
childhood
b
ecome
Suggestion
becomes
mature enough and knows how to deal with p
ublic
Suggestion
the public
and it helps them when they go into the market after their graduation.
For instance
, it has been reported by the Jang News article that people who
work
in their
childhood
understand people better in j
ob market
Suggestion
the job market
and that c
apibility
the quality of being capable -- physically or intellectually or legally
capability
increased the chances of their success up to 65%.
Nevertheless
, children should not do that kind of
work
that a
ffect
Suggestion
affects
their studies or health. In conclusion,
although
it is often said that children should not forced to do
work
because they are not strong enough and it e
ffects
have an effect upon
affects
their studies, I believe working in e
arly years
Suggestion
the early years
of life teaches them many lessons that prepares them for the future.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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