More and more are moving away from an agricultural background to relocate to cities in order to look for work? What will be consequences of this? What solutions can you offer?

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Over the past few decades

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the farmers are shifting to urban areas

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leaving their villages and farmland for seeking good jobs.The rural people seem that living in

town

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cozy

affected with madness or insanity

crazy

as well as earning money is possible effortlessly

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any time anywhere.

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this

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essay

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I intend to explore the sources of

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problem

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along with some possible solutions to it. Chief among the causes of

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problem

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is the movement of people from

village

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town

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not only reduce the farm production but

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the food shortage.

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the regime has to import food from other parts of the world.

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moving to an urban area indiscriminately

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the

town

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will become congested today or tomorrow.

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getting an apartment in an urban area has become

solid

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solid, hence

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the residents have to count a large amount of money to pay the rent of

house

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the house

houses

a house

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my uncle used to live in a

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village but

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village, but

recently he has shifted to the

city

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, now it has become difficult for him to afford to pay the rent of house monthly.It is

noticeable

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noticed

that the price of vegetables in the

city

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is higher than the

village

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due to the huge consumer live in together. In order to resolve

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problem

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there are many steps that can be taken as

solution

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a solution

the solution

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the local government can provide modern facilities like

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the local

councilor

a member of a council

councillor

councillors

can take some

realistic

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real

steps to upgrade the rural conditions.

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farmers in the villages are poor in communication and transportation system

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so they are not getting the fair value of their farm goods.

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the government immediately should ensure those facilities.

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, they would prefer to live in their

village

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, I heard that my grandfather was a successful

farmer but

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farmer, but

he did not get his fair value of the products

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one day he got angry and came to the

city

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forever.

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if the villagers get good the opportunity of works as well as the salary is reasonable they will not intend to move to the

city

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. In conclusion

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I believe that

this

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is clearly a

problem

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such

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complexity that no solution is likely in the short term.

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the government should provide employment for the people of

village

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like people of the

city

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

357 words

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More and more are moving away from an agricultural background to relocate to cities in order to look for work? What will be consequences of this? What solutions can you offer?

Your opinion

Some business observe that new employees who just graduated from a college or university seem to lack interpersonal skills needed for communication with their colleagues. What could be the reason for this? What solution can help address this problem?

As well as making money, businesses also have a responsibility towards society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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