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International air travel has a negative impact upon the environment and should therefore be restricted.

#air #travel #impact #environment
There are strong condemns across the world towards environmental pollution.
Thus
 polluting in any major form needs to be banned. But travelling in
air
Suggestion
the air
does'nt
does not
doesn't
 contribute to high level impact on the environment which will be discussed with
facts
Suggestion
the facts
 and points. The decision to reduce air
travel
 cannot cause any serious role in protecting the environment.
Moreover
, if the means to flight
travel
 is reduced
,
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,
 people tend to prefer other means of transport like roadways
,
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,
 which will ultimately result in more pollution due to the high amount of toxic gases released.
As a result
 of limited flight
travel
 will certainly cause a huge decrease in
global economy
Suggestion
the global economy
global economies
 as more business people tend to
travel
 overseas to expand their businesses and limiting air
travel
 will impact the business which will reduce the economy. Modes of transport in any way will release toxic fumes.
Inorder
Suggestion
In order
 to efficiently control environmental hazards is to restrict the unused and obsolete flights will can contribute to the plastic affecting aquatic life.In New Zealand
,
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,
 roadway
travel
 will be restricted to certain days and more people prefer cycles to
travel
 to a shorter distance which can improve climate conditions. In conclusion, reducing airways cannot contribute to
environment
Suggestion
environmental
 hazard in a major way and alternate sources
has
Suggestion
have
 to be analysed to improve the
envionmental
of or relating to the external conditions or surroundings
environmental
 conditions
.
Accept space
.

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