The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists traveling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia's share of the Japanese tourist market.

The bar graph illustrates how many

Japanese

tourists travelled to abroad countries between 1985 and 1995

while

the line graph shows the number of

Japanese

tourists received by

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Australia's Share market.

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,

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who travelled

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overseas

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over the given period the same is true for the Australian share market receiving

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Japanese

visitors.

Firstly

, moving into a bar chart, around 5

millions

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Japanese

tourist

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visited

to

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overseas in 1985.

This

trend continues to increase until 1990 at around 11

millions

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. In

year

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1991, there was a slight decrease in the

visitors

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which is around less than 11

millions

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,

whereas

the

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following two years received a gradual increase reaching exactly

at

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12 million in the

year

1993.

Finally

, the

Japanese

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tourist visiting overseas reached around 15 million, which is almost double

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the starting

year

1985. Moving into the line graph, 2%

Japanese

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tourists visited

in

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Australia in the

year

1985 and with the steady increase in the trend the figure reached

to

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around one in twenty (5%) in 1988. The following

year

received

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decreased in market share, but the figure went higher in subsequent years, reaching

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peak in the

year

1993 at slightly higher than 6%.The trend

end

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exactly at 6% in the final

year

.