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A local college is having an international day. You want to speak about your country to students from different cultures. Write a letter to the college head. In your letter: Tell him/her about the topics that you are going to talk about Explain why would they be of interest to the students Ask about any arrangements that you need to make to give the talk

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Dear Mr Thomas, I am writing
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 to express my interest in organizing an activity for students on the international day.
Due to
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 the coming soon of an
international day
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International Day
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, I have an idea to create an event for students to participate
and
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in and
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 gain some knowledge of cultural diversity. The activity that I would like to do is a talk show on a topic of your country. By providing international pupils to speak about their local living
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 as traditional languages, local food, customs and so on. It would be excellent for students to learn different cultures from the original people in the country.
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, I’m thinking of the preparation for
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 event.
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, the stage would be set in the hall with 100 seats for the
audiences
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 which could be added for more attendees up to 150 people.
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, providing some presents for the speakers to thank them for sharing
the
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their
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 valuable stories
to
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 us. I would appreciate it very much if you would consider approving
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 project.
Your
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 Sincerely, Tom

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Task Response
Clarify the specific topics you plan to cover in your talk to improve task achievement scores.
Coherence and Cohesion
Consider clearly grouping the ideas and segments in your letter; however, overall flow is good.
Coherence and Cohesion
The letter is structured well with clear sections like greeting, introduction, and conclusion.
Task Response
The tone of the letter is polite and appropriately formal, showing respect.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • international day
  • cultural significance
  • regional specialties
  • festivals and holidays
  • tourist attractions
  • natural wonders
  • education system
  • technological advancements
  • global development
  • sports and leisure activities
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